After reviewing your resume using our proprietary 100 point scale, your score is 42 out of 100. There are many area where your resume can use improvement. Since we will be writing your resume and addressing these flaws, I will only point out the major mistakes here in this evaluation. To start with, the summary and section and qualifications section should be combined. I applaud you for adding a summary statement and not just a simple objective, as that is a trap a lot of entry level job seekers fall into. The summary has to be tight, 4 sentences is ideal with the last sentence acting as your objective.
The glaring mistake with your resume is the use of the person pronoun “I.” This is a major flaw and the use of pronouns in a resume is never acceptable. Since a resume is a personal documentation regarding your experience and education, the “I” is assumed and should not be added. Another mistake is that you focus too much on extra curricular activities instead of your work experience. The bulk of your resume should focus on jobs that you help and the skills you developed. Extra curricular experience is good but should be kept to a minimum. Other flaws include the layout and design of your resume(or lack thereof) there is no theme or continuity and it certainly does not scream “hire me.” I can continue, but I think you get the point.
Stayed tuned for the new and improved resume.
